Don’t get
attached to the dog. It’s a goner.
Sure, the
sweet-tempered pooch gently licks your heroine’s wrist while she sobs into her
handkerchief and the hero rides off once again. Or the stalwart dog appears
loyally in chapter after chapter, baring teeth and thwarting evil to lend your hero a slim moment to escape.
Perhaps you
haven’t gifted your protagonist with a dog. You’re chosen a best friend from college. Or a sage curmudgeon who nonetheless offers tea and advice in
chapters 3, 6 and 9. Maybe your hero’s father stands resolutely in the wings,
ready to provide comfort the moment the going gets rough.
Well, no matter.
My gun is locked and loaded. I’m taking Dad out.
The construction
of your story requires more than a riveting battle between protagonist and
antagonist. The most compelling novels escalate the tension in a million subtle
ways, boxing in the main character and removing his means of support like so
many pawns knocked off the chessboard.
Why is Twilight still a sensation seven years
after its publication? Consider Edward, a blood-sucking creature of the dead as
vicious as Count Dracula yet equipped with an ethical sensibility. First Edward
suffers the irritating attentions of a curious girl he’s met at high school.
Soon he realizes he’s drawn to her in ways that sap his deadly powers.
When he falls for her, he must struggle against the blood lust that urges him
to kill. Soon several members of his vampire family—the only characters he can
trust—begin to despise his beloved Bella. Of course, he also must contend with
Bella’s best friend and the natural enemy of the Cullen vampires—teen hunk and
local werewolf, Jacob.
All of those
roadblocks appear before Edward
learns he must protect his love from the vampire coven intent on killing her.
Popular fiction
isn’t your thing? How about the Pulitzer prize-winning To Kill a Mockingbird? The young girl, Scout, must watch her father
valiantly attempt to defend a black man wrongly accused of rape. Not only does
her father fail and the accused man die, but Scout must make sense of the
pervasive racism of 1930s Alabama through the lens of a child’s imperfect
understanding. Or take Josep K. in Franz Kafka’s The Trial, a bank manager arrested for an unknown crime only to
discover the advice he solicits from associates is contradictory and
untrustworthy.
Regardless of
genre, the most compelling fiction heaps woe after woe upon the main character.
In my debut, Treasure Me, petty thief
Birdie Kaminisky doesn’t simply battle a growing awareness that stealing is
just plain wrong. She begins to measure her ignoble habits against the
exemplary life of a former slave from long ago that built the restaurant where
Birdie now works. Both the town’s matriarch and an investigative journalist
begin to uncover our young heroine’s thieving past. Finally, the entire town is
set against her.
As a novelist
you can be forgiven for falling in love with your protagonist, but you must
shear away any protective instincts you harbor. Hurt your hero. Discover her
greatest desire and thwart it. Give him choices that offer no easy way out. Let
her have an affair with her best friend’s husband then have her choose to come
clean and call the mess off. Before she’s let off the hook and the confession
is made, send the man’s car spinning off a cliff.
Reading is,
after all, an escape from the humdrum business of life. The hero who always
takes the high road isn’t particularly heroic. Give me a down-and-out PI with a
drinking problem and a soul in need of redemption. Now you’ve got my attention.
The more your protagonist
must overcome psychologically and in the outer world of your story, the more
conflict he’s forced to face, the greater possibility for growth. Equip him
with secondary characters that pull double-duty: the folksy neighbor set on the
page as confidant should muck up the works at the worst possible moment. The
adored father should hide a gambling habit or an embarrassing libido. Send the sweet Golden Lab into oncoming
traffic when your hero needs it most.
Kill the dog.
You have my permission, and your readers will thank you.
A note on
housekeeping: This week my oldest daughter returns from a semester abroad. She took many gorgeous photos while bombing across Europe, and I'm not too proud to steal from her FaceBook page. No, the art you'll see on this and future posts has nothing to do with the essays. Yes, I love the photos and hope you will too.

I needed to hear this today. I've posted somthing similar recently called "You gotta bust up the concrete". I've decided I'm too nice. I keep trying to reform my villian when I need to make him meaner!!!
ReplyDeleteBust up that concrete, Lily. Erect the roadblocks, create havoc, and make your villain meaner. I like to tell critique partners to avoid vanilla pudding at all costs. Here's hoping your novel gives the reader the ride of her life!
DeleteYou've said it so well! You can love your protagonist, but as a writer, you have to make him/her suffer--tough love. That's life on THIS side of the rainbow, and it keeps things exciting for readers...realistic, too.
ReplyDeleteMarjorie, one of the biggest complaints literary agents & editors have is that a story lacks verve because the protagonist is weak. You're correct: as writers we must put our main character through the hoops, hurt him, make the obstacles nearly impossible to surmount. If we don't, the reader soon loses interest.
DeleteMany thanks for reading along.
You're making me feel so much better about the review of my book that was horrified at the torment and struggle heaped upon my MC.
ReplyDeleteJohanna, I'd ignore that review. The vast majority of readers are drawn to stories with great conflict and much for the MC to overcome. I'm better all your other reviews were absolutely wonderful!
DeleteMany thanks for reading along.
What a great post! Well, back to the drawing board. My WIP, a romantic suspense, will be getting some much needed changes. Thank you so much!
ReplyDeleteGood luck with the WIP, Teri. And many thanks for reading along.
DeleteI needed to hear this, too. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteViansa, a lit agent once told me that most writers are such nice people, they find it difficult to cause havoc in their character's lives. So true, and we need to toughen up!
DeleteMany thanks for reading along.